Three consistent themes emerged across the feedback after presenting my work to a few peers. Reviewer 1 and Reviewer 2 both identified the need for visual evidence of the illustration direction , a gap I will address by producing annotated sketch development showing how symbolism is embedded into each drawn scene. Reviewer 2's concern about exploitative tone is one I take seriously; as Benjamin (2019) argues, systems must be assessed by their outcomes rather than their intentions, and this applies equally to my own design. I will ensure the narrative centres Sudanese experience rather than Western consumption of suffering.

Reviewer 1's question , how does the user know what they're missing? , is the most productive challenge. Bridle (2018) argues that networked systems produce opacity rather than clarity; my design response is to make that opacity legible through glitching text, loading failures, and redacted content, signalling absence without filling it. Reviewer 3's suggestion around sound and texture is one I will explore as a further disruption layer.

Reviewer 2 and Reviewer 3 both raised navigation , I will develop a linear journey, as Halloran's (2015) controlled disclosure model demonstrates that pacing and sequence are essential to communicating magnitude. An open navigation would undermine the deliberate withholding the project depends on.

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